Haunted Tales

The Rapture, 3rd class

Posted by the dune mouse on

a short story with a bit of irreverent silliness. As the saying goes it seems when others see a light in the tunnel I see an oncoming train.

Inspired by Leanne Cole’s photo “up in the air

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This wasn’t how she had planned it. She tried to feel exalted  but it was very difficult. She had always envisioned being in a meadow bathed in golden light, with a flight of doves, an angelic choir, a divine hand appearing through the swirl of clouds like Michelangelo’s Creation of Adam, reaching toward hers.

Instead, unceremoniously, in the middle of a dingy alleyway, in the heart of the sinful city, she was suddenly lifted from the hot brick paving stones.  She was drawn upward slowly in fits and starts, her little toes pointing toward the earth, her arms open and her head dangling backward in surprise.

She knew she wasn’t one of the most saintly members of the congregation, but she wasn’t the worst either. She just plain wasn’t ready for this! Her shoes had fallen off and what was even worse was that she suddenly remembered how her mother, who had a  fear of embarrassing moments, always told her to be prepared in case of a rapture, to not only dress appropriately but also make sure her underwear was clean and without holes.

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  1. Robyn G says:
    29 Jul 2014 at 9:29 am

    Ha ha you crazy girl.. Love it!
    I often see the train too 😉

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      29 Jul 2014 at 3:45 pm

      😀 a kindred soul!! thanks Robyn!

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      1. Robyn G says:
        29 Jul 2014 at 8:59 pm

        Yes 😀

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  2. Jackie Saulmon Ramirez says:
    28 Jul 2014 at 4:41 pm

    This is amazing!

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      28 Jul 2014 at 7:03 pm

      thanks Jackie!

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  3. The Passion Dew says:
    27 Jul 2014 at 12:36 pm

    Very .. very inspired this story.
    I imagined that I slowly leaving this world 😀 … just in the story 🙂
    Amazing Cybele, enjoy your day!

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  4. Maria F. says:
    26 Jul 2014 at 7:57 pm

    Incredible effect, it’s so surreal, so is the story, with a touch of humor.

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      26 Jul 2014 at 8:25 pm

      thank you Maria!! I love the photo too!!

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  5. Lizzie Gudkov says:
    26 Jul 2014 at 4:36 pm

    Haha!! Great ending! It totally contrasts with the rest of the text! Well done!

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      26 Jul 2014 at 4:40 pm

      thanks Lizzie!! Your comments mean a lot!!! Glad it made you smile!!

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  6. Wyn says:
    26 Jul 2014 at 2:06 am

    I love your endings – and your humor. You are a true storyteller!

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      26 Jul 2014 at 2:26 am

      I try!! 😀

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  7. Andrea Stephenson says:
    25 Jul 2014 at 8:34 pm

    🙂 Great take on the photo Cybele – unpredictable as always!

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      25 Jul 2014 at 9:18 pm

      thanks Andrea!!!

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  8. Peter Nena says:
    25 Jul 2014 at 10:36 am

    I love that photo. I have this big grin on my face as I write this. Ha! Made my Friday!

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      25 Jul 2014 at 2:55 pm

      I’m glad it made you smile Peter!! The photo by Leanne Cole is superb!

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  9. Snow's Fissures and Fractures says:
    25 Jul 2014 at 8:17 am

    What a great story. I am familiar with that underwear part, my grandma used to say things like that to me. 🙂

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      25 Jul 2014 at 2:55 pm

      didn’t they though!! 😀 thanks for the comment Snow!

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  10. Mélanie says:
    25 Jul 2014 at 6:24 am

    @”make sure her underwear was clean and without holes.” – wow, ma Belle Lune, it’s quite a “classy and refined” piece of advice, but this is a challenging provocation, babe! 🙂

    r u “wicked” as you’ve mentioned?… so what?!… it may be a compliment, as well… 😉

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      25 Jul 2014 at 2:53 pm

      thanks Melanie! Yes I am a bit bent I fear!! When others see a light in the tunnel I see an oncoming train!! 😀

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      1. Mélanie says:
        26 Jul 2014 at 6:39 am

        ❤ same here, sweet sis'… 😉 that's why I always carry an invisible lamp with me… 😀

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      2. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
        26 Jul 2014 at 6:59 am

        I should too!! 🙂

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  11. Emilio Pasquale says:
    25 Jul 2014 at 2:55 am

    Is that a warning that crosses all nationalities? All religious beliefs? Make sure your underwear is clean and free of holes? From now on I go everywhere in dirty underwear. With holes the size of quarters. I will be remembered!

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      25 Jul 2014 at 3:13 am

      😀 That will be very holy indeed. thanks for reading!!

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  12. Sandra says:
    25 Jul 2014 at 12:19 am

    Very nice CybeleMoon! Love your interpretation on such a beguiling photo. xoxo

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      25 Jul 2014 at 1:37 am

      thanks Sandra!!!

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  13. Embracing a Wounded Soul says:
    24 Jul 2014 at 10:51 pm

    Intriguing photo and words…

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      24 Jul 2014 at 11:00 pm

      Thank you!! I hope it brought a chuckle!! 🙂

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      1. Embracing a Wounded Soul says:
        24 Jul 2014 at 11:12 pm

        I did find it funny 🙂 and i also pondered philosophically upon it 😀 my brain tends to do that :p

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      2. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
        24 Jul 2014 at 11:22 pm

        Oh mine does that too!!! 😀

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      3. Embracing a Wounded Soul says:
        24 Jul 2014 at 11:25 pm

        Lol even the underwear part had me in deep thought 😀

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  14. Suzanne says:
    24 Jul 2014 at 10:34 pm

    Gorgeous. What a lovely idea. 🙂

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      24 Jul 2014 at 11:01 pm

      😀 Thanks Suzanne!

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  15. Leanne Cole says:
    24 Jul 2014 at 10:15 pm

    That is great Cybele, I love the end of it, I can imagine that happening, thank you so much.

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      24 Jul 2014 at 10:18 pm

      Glad you like it!! I hope it’s not sacrilegious!!

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  16. Linda Arthur Tejera says:
    24 Jul 2014 at 10:06 pm

    Very cool, Cybele! 🙂

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    1. the dune mouse (CybeleMoon) says:
      24 Jul 2014 at 10:17 pm

      oh I am a bit wicked sometimes!! 🙂 thanks Linda!!

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