The Rapture, 3rd class

a short story with a bit of irreverent silliness. As the saying goes it seems when others see a light in the tunnel I see an oncoming train.

Inspired by Leanne Cole’s photo “up in the air

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This wasn’t how she had planned it. She tried to feel exalted  but it was very difficult. She had always envisioned being in a meadow bathed in golden light, with a flight of doves, an angelic choir, a divine hand appearing through the swirl of clouds like Michelangelo’s Creation of Adam, reaching toward hers.

Instead, unceremoniously, in the middle of a dingy alleyway, in the heart of the sinful city, she was suddenly lifted from the hot brick paving stones.  She was drawn upward slowly in fits and starts, her little toes pointing toward the earth, her arms open and her head dangling backward in surprise.

She knew she wasn’t one of the most saintly members of the congregation, but she wasn’t the worst either. She just plain wasn’t ready for this! Her shoes had fallen off and what was even worse was that she suddenly remembered how her mother, who had a  fear of embarrassing moments, always told her to be prepared in case of a rapture, to not only dress appropriately but also make sure her underwear was clean and without holes.

37 Comments Add yours

  1. Robyn G says:

    Ha ha you crazy girl.. Love it!
    I often see the train too 😉

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    1. 😀 a kindred soul!! thanks Robyn!

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  2. Jackie Saulmon Ramirez says:

    This is amazing!

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  3. Very .. very inspired this story.
    I imagined that I slowly leaving this world 😀 … just in the story 🙂
    Amazing Cybele, enjoy your day!

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  4. Maria F. says:

    Incredible effect, it’s so surreal, so is the story, with a touch of humor.

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    1. thank you Maria!! I love the photo too!!

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  5. Haha!! Great ending! It totally contrasts with the rest of the text! Well done!

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    1. thanks Lizzie!! Your comments mean a lot!!! Glad it made you smile!!

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  6. Wyn says:

    I love your endings – and your humor. You are a true storyteller!

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  7. 🙂 Great take on the photo Cybele – unpredictable as always!

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  8. Peter Nena says:

    I love that photo. I have this big grin on my face as I write this. Ha! Made my Friday!

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    1. I’m glad it made you smile Peter!! The photo by Leanne Cole is superb!

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  9. What a great story. I am familiar with that underwear part, my grandma used to say things like that to me. 🙂

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    1. didn’t they though!! 😀 thanks for the comment Snow!

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  10. Mélanie says:

    @”make sure her underwear was clean and without holes.” – wow, ma Belle Lune, it’s quite a “classy and refined” piece of advice, but this is a challenging provocation, babe! 🙂

    r u “wicked” as you’ve mentioned?… so what?!… it may be a compliment, as well… 😉

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    1. thanks Melanie! Yes I am a bit bent I fear!! When others see a light in the tunnel I see an oncoming train!! 😀

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      1. Mélanie says:

        ❤ same here, sweet sis'… 😉 that's why I always carry an invisible lamp with me… 😀

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  11. Emilio Pasquale says:

    Is that a warning that crosses all nationalities? All religious beliefs? Make sure your underwear is clean and free of holes? From now on I go everywhere in dirty underwear. With holes the size of quarters. I will be remembered!

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    1. 😀 That will be very holy indeed. thanks for reading!!

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  12. Sandra says:

    Very nice CybeleMoon! Love your interpretation on such a beguiling photo. xoxo

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  13. Embracing a Wounded Soul says:

    Intriguing photo and words…

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    1. Thank you!! I hope it brought a chuckle!! 🙂

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      1. Embracing a Wounded Soul says:

        I did find it funny 🙂 and i also pondered philosophically upon it 😀 my brain tends to do that :p

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      2. Oh mine does that too!!! 😀

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      3. Embracing a Wounded Soul says:

        Lol even the underwear part had me in deep thought 😀

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  14. Suzanne says:

    Gorgeous. What a lovely idea. 🙂

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  15. Leanne Cole says:

    That is great Cybele, I love the end of it, I can imagine that happening, thank you so much.

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    1. Glad you like it!! I hope it’s not sacrilegious!!

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  16. Very cool, Cybele! 🙂

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    1. oh I am a bit wicked sometimes!! 🙂 thanks Linda!!

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